Tuesday, November 27, 2018

A Fragment of Yesterday

A few months ago, I came up with the following lines.  They are just few simple verses I whipped up in about ten minutes or so.  I was meaning to expand the ideas somehow, but I just never got around to picking it back up.  Perhaps it was because the lines are so simple, that it is harder to finish them off.  Anyway, here they are

One word is all I need,
     Take you away from here.
You just have to say it
     And then we will be free.
Pick you destination,
     Pick anywhere at all.
Then we'll be together
     And never be apart.

As you can see, the verses are fairly simple, with an off-rhyme scheme.  I am still not sure what I need to do to complete this poem.  It isn't bad, per se, but it seems too simple to be finished.  The night I came up with this, I tried to write a second stanza, but nothing seemed to go with it.  Maybe anyone out there can help me out.  The poem feels whole, but it still needs more.  It just seems missing something, but I can't figure out what.  Well, I have some news.  Starting either next week or the following one, not only will I go back to my book, I think I will be able to post more than once a week.  At least for the next month or so.  Since I will be on winter break from grad school, I will have more time to write what I want to write. Until next semester, when I will hopefully be taking an advanced fiction writer's workshop.  I probably won't be able to continue this project for the class, but  I will be writing something else, short stories I think.  Anyway, I will be writing more, so be looking out for it.

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